Poetry

[Cloudpiroth]

Hi everybody, thought I'd write something. Leave me some lovin'

What I Think About You

You want to know what I think about you?
I believe that your the best thing to ever to happen to me.
Your hair spills down like a cascade of golden honey.
Your eyes have a deep sense of understanding to them.
Your skin is soft like a sheep's wool.
Your voice is like an angel.
That is what I think of you.

What I feel about your personality is better.
You have an air of confidence,
Which drives me wild.
Your wisdom far exceeds mine,
Even though I'm older.
The way you carry yourself,
Gives me a sense of serenity.
That is what I think of you.

Put this all together,
And you got a wonderful girl.
I wish I had the courage,
To ask you out.
For I hope you would say "yes"
And give us the best of both worlds.

[liquid sword]

sometimes i just want to die!
But i dont want to see you cry!
i just want to hit the ground.
Your voice to be the last sound

But id rathier you hold me in your embrace
Never want to miss your face
I come to you with scars on my wrist's
and tell you i dont want to feel like this

You tell me everything will be alwright
and i relise you were right
and now you have my heart
and there's not one moment were apart

Even thou i lost you
i will always love you
your my angel forever
cause there's not one moment were not togetheir!

[Yoherz]

I think he meant to comment on it LS, not post another one.

Very nice job on the descriptions (cascade of golden honey, especially), but maybe make it less about talk to her, and more about talking about her, then saying something like "this is what I think about you" at the end so the reader knows you're talking to her, about her. It makes it less direct, if that makes sense. lol.

[liquid sword]

are..... okay good keep it up kid!